Authors: Presentation Secrets
Average words/
13.79
18.23
sentence
Lexical density
15.76%
24.52%
Hard words
3.18%
5.2%
Fog index
6.79
9.37
Table 10.2 compares some exact phrases from the 2007
presentations. Excerpts from Bill Gates’s remarks are in the
right column.
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The left column contains excerpts from Steve Jobs
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Where Gates is obtuse, Jobs is clear. Where Gates is abstract,
Jobs is tangible. Where Gates is complex, Jobs is simple.
Now, I can hear you saying, “Bill Gates might not speak
as simply as Jobs, but he’s the richest guy in the world, so he
must have done something right.” You’re correct. He did. Gates
invented Windows, the operating system installed in 90 per-
cent of the world’s computers. You, however, did not. Your
audience will not let you get away with language they’ll accept
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TABLE 10.2
VERBIAGE IN GATES’S 2007 CES KEYNOTE VERSUS
JOBS’S 2007 MACWORLD KEYNOTE
BILL GATES, 2007 INTERNATIONAL
STEVE JOBS, 2007 MACWORLD
CONSUMER ELECTRONICS SHOW
”You know, it was just a year
“The processors are now opening the
ago that I was up here and
memory capability up to 64-bit, and
announced that we were going
that’s a transition we’re making without
to switch to Intel processors.
a lot of incompatibility, without paying
It was a huge heart transplant
a lot of extra money. Software, the
to Intel microprocessors. And
old 32-bit software, can run, but if you
I said that we would do it over
need to get more space, it’s just there.”
the coming twelve months. We
did it in seven months, and it’s
been the smoothest and most
successful transition that we’ve
ever seen in the history of our
industry.”
“Now I’d like to tell you a few
“The process we’ve been through over
things about iTunes that
this year—there was a beta 2—got
are pretty exciting . . . We
out to over two million people. The
are selling over five million
release candidate, which was our last
songs a day now. Isn’t that
chance for feedback, got out to over
unbelievable? That’s fifty-eight
five million. We had a lot of in-depth
songs every second of every
things where we went in and sat and
minute of every hour of every
interviewed people using Windows
day.”
Vista in family situations. We did that
in seven different countries. We did
incredible performance simulation,
getting over sixty years equivalent
of performance testing with all the
common mix of applications that were
out there.”
“We’ve got awesome TV shows
“Microsoft Office has got a new
on iTunes. As a matter of fact,
user interface; it’s got new ways of
we have over 350 TV shows
connecting up to Office Live services
that you can buy episodes from
and SharePoint, but the discoverability
on iTunes. And I’m very pleased
of the richness is advanced dramatically
to report that we have now
by that user interface.”
sold fifty million TV shows on
iTunes. Isn’t that incredible?”
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from Gates. If your presentations are confusing, convoluted,
and full of jargon, you will miss an opportunity to engage and
excite your listeners. Strive for understanding. Avoid lexical
density.
You might have noticed that many of Jobs’s favorite words
are the type of words most people use in everyday watercooler
conversation: “amazing, incredible, gorgeous.” Most presenters
change their language for a pitch or presentation. Jobs speaks
the same way onstage as he does offstage. He has confidence in
his brand and has fun with the words he chooses. Some critics
might say his language borders on hyperbole, but Jobs echoes
the sentiments shared by millions of his customers.
Of course, you should use words that authentically represent
your service, brand, or product. A financial adviser recom-
mending a mutual fund to a client would appear insincere (and
probably dishonest) if he or she said, “This new mutual fund will
revolutionize the financial industry as we know it. It’s amazing,
and you need to invest your money in it right now.” Instead,
the financial adviser could say, “Mutual funds are amazing
products that will help your money grow while lowering your
risk. There are thousands of funds available, but I’m especially
excited about a new one. Let me tell you more about it . . .” In
the latter statement, our financial adviser has chosen words that
are simple and emotional while still maintaining his or her pro-
fessionalism and integrity.
Don’t be afraid of using simple words and descriptive adjec-
tives. If you genuinely find a product “amazing,” go ahead and
say so. After all, if you’re not excited about it, how do you expect
the rest of us to be?
Avoid Jargon Creep
Jargon rarely creeps into Jobs’s language. His words are con-
versational and simple. Jargon—language that is specific to a
particular industry—creates a roadblock to the free and easy
exchange of ideas. I have attended countless meetings in which
two people who work for different divisions of the same com-
pany cannot understand the jargon used by the other. Jargon and
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buzzwords are meaningless and empty and will most certainly
make you
less
understandable and therefore less persuasive.
Mission statements are the worst culprits of jargon creep.
Mission statements typically are long, convoluted, jargon-laden
paragraphs created in multiple committee meetings and destined
to be forgotten. They are replete with jargon and murky words
you will rarely hear from Jobs, such as “synergy,” “principle-
centered,” and “best of breed.” These expressions are nonsense,
yet on any given day, employees in companies around the world
are sitting in committee meetings to see just how many such
words can be crammed into a single sentence.
Apple’s mission statement, on the other hand, is simple, clear,
and impactful. It’s full of emotive words and tangible examples.
It reads (emphasis added):
Apple
ignited
the personal computer revolution in the 1970s
with the Apple II and
reinvented
the personal computer with
the Macintosh. Today, Apple continues to
lead
the industry
in
innovation
with its award-winning computers, OS X oper-
ating system, and iLife and professional applications. Apple
is also
spearheading
the digital media revolution with its iPod portable music and video players and iTunes online store,
and has entered the mobile phone market with its
revolution-
ary
iPhone
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The words Jobs chooses to announce a new product have
three characteristics: they are simple, concrete, and emotionally
charged.
Simple.
Free of jargon and with few syllables.
Concrete.
Very specific phrases. Short, tangible descriptions instead of long, abstract discussions.
Emotional.
Descriptive adjectives.
Examples of each of these three characteristics appear in Jobs’s
introduction of the MacBook Air: “This is the MacBook Air. You can
get a feel for how thin it is [concrete]. It has a full-size keyboard and display [simple]. Isn’t it amazing [emotional]? This is what it looks
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A Guru Who Keeps It Simple
It was hard to miss financial guru Suze Orman in 2008 and
2009 when the global financial markets were collapsing. In
addition to appearing on her own CNBC show, the bestselling
author was a frequent guest on shows such as “Oprah” and
“Larry King Live.” Banks and financial companies were also
using her in advertisements meant to alleviate their custom-
ers’ fears. I interviewed Orman several times and found her
to be surprisingly candid about the secret to her success as a
communicator.
“How do you make complicated financial topics easy to
understand?” I once asked.
“Too many people want to impress others with the infor-
mation they have so others think the speaker is intelligent,”
Orman responded.
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“But Suze,” I said, “If your message is too simple, don’t you
risk not being taken seriously?”
I don’t care what people think about it. All I care about is
that the information I’m imparting empowers the listener
or reader of my material . . . If your intention is to impart a
message that will create change for the person listening,
then if you ask me, it is respectful to that person to make
the message as simple as possible. For example, if I gave
you directions to how to get to my house, you would
want me to give you the simplest directions to get there.
If I made it more complicated, you would not be bet-
ter off. You might get aggravated and give up. If it were
simple, chances are you will get in your car and try to
get to my house rather than giving up and saying it’s not
worth it. Others criticize simplicity because they need
to feel that it’s more complicated. If everything were so
simple, they think their jobs could be eliminated. It’s our
fear of extinction, our fear of elimination, our fear of not
being important that leads us to communicate things in
a more complex way than we need to.
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